Shishoui, Kyoichi

{{• The Proficiency
I'm
searching for the the map of the future in the center of the
intersection
Special Ability:Makotosuki (Eyes of truth)
Explanation & Limits of Gift:

• Can use telepathic powers. The user's eyes look something like a yin yang symbol that's sideways. The user can read minds and use telepathy taking up a moderate amount of energy. The user must make eye contact with a person to read their mind, and the longer the user can keep eye contact, the more of that persons memories and thoughts from before are obtained. these memories can be deleted from the users brain later on. if the user has become good friends with someone they can read their current thoughts and speak to them within 2,000 feet. Telepathy uses more energy the farther away they are. The effectiveness of Makotosuki can be disrupted with enough distraction as the user needs a high amount of focus to use it. a con of makotosuki is that while it is activated, it is impossible for kyoichi to lie.
  

Weapon: Black Moon
Explanation of Weapon:

• A 3 1/2 foot long katana that is bonded to Kyoichi. The way of un-bonding it from was known only by his father. It is completely and totally black. the darkest shade you can think of "multiplied by 10". It has a miniature version of Makotosuki as a hilt guard and is as hard as a diamonds. the sword is extremely sharp and cannot dull. It weighs 15 ounces (it is made out of an unknown material, the material was extracted from a meteor generations ago). Kyoichi's bond with this weapon gives him the following powers over it-
  (these are the pros)
  <sub>1. Only he can touch it without it shooting out dark wind, which cuts them and blows itself away from them.
  2. He can store energy in it for use later on or use it as a medium to channel magic through.
  3. dark wind can be shot out of black moon. the wind can cut, depending on what kind of wind attack is used. short bursts of wind attacks that are arched can make cuts and have a small blow back force. a wider, less concentrated attack will blow an enemy or object in the direction the wind is shot. if the wind is narrowed to the extreme it will have a piercing effect, like a dark wind arrow. the more narrow or concentrated the wind, the more damage done, but the less area hit and the less blow back force.</sub>
  
• _{(the cons)}
  
• _{1. any energy stored in black moon can not be taken back out, unless it is used for elemental attacks.}
  
  
• _{2. black moon has a curse on it that only allows it to injure, not kill, therefore, no matter how fatal the wounds inflicted by it look, they aren't.}
  
• _{3. if black moon is separated from its current master by a distance of more than 300 ft for up to 48 hours, the sword will disintegrate}
  
  

{{• The Presence
I
believed in dreams always coming true on the other side of the
sky!
Physical Looks: 5' 5" tall. 125 lbs. Dark blue eyes. Spiky dirty blond hair, shoulder length. has a medium size build, with highly developed muscles from martial arts training. He has white skin that is slightly tan. Has 7 scars on his body, 3 of which are noticeable. These resulted from harsh training, and mishaps while training with magic. One scar is from a sparring accident, a 4 inch vertical slash along his left shoulder. the 2nd and 3rd noticeable scars are on the right side of his abdomen, a inch diameter scar that resulted from misfired magic by Kyoichi, it goes through and comes out the back, which is the third scar. it hit between the stomach and liver, it was nearly fatal. Clothes: Black cloak that zips down except for the hood and a broach that looks like the Makotosuki that keeps it hanging around his neck. it goes down as long as his feet. the hem of the cloak is worn and torn from use as he wears it almost all the time. (Sometimes it's zipped up with the hood hiding his face) The end of the sleeves are wide. He has a loose black shirt on under the cloak. The cloak has many pockets that hold all kinds of things in them, so the cloak weighs more than average.. the sleeves stop just past his elbows. He has a harness that holds his sword and sheath that can be taken out of the cloak and strapped to his back. He has loose baggy black shorts that stop above the ankle and below the knee. He wears black custom shoes most of the time that look like a cross between converse and Etnies.

{{• The Persona
What is there beyond the night? There are times filled with anxiety
General
Attitude/Personality: A happy go lucky and optimistic guy, he looks at everything from different angles and with an open mind. He's very laid back and joking. When he meets a person he usually will be polite and not overly respectful. As he begins to get to know them he will become more casual and his true personality will come out. He's almost always the first to apologize for something. He knows when to be serious, and when he becomes serious he completely focuses on the task at hand, and will usually not hold back in a fight if he becomes serious during it. He will give anyone a chance to be his friend as long as they are willing. He likes to cook and eat. His favorite foods are sesame chicken, ramen, and pizza. his favorite color is black. he plays guitar alot and has since he was young, so he can play almost any song as long as he knows the notes. When he is alone, he is quiet and ponders things from previous event, or plays his guitar. He sometimes talks to himself.
Goals: To avenge his parent's deaths and become a successful mage.
Likes: Girls, cooking/eating, fighting, playing guitar
Dislikes: People who dislike him for no reason.
Bad Habits: Bites finger nails a lot, day dreams.
Fears: Claustrophobia, spiders.
Other:

{{• The Past
Even
if it's impossible, if we don't do anything, it will stay
zero
Parents: Chisu Shishoui (father) Ashley Shishoui (mother) Both are deceased.
Siblings: None
History: Kyoichi was born in the United States. His father, Chisu, had traveled there for reasons unknown. He met Ashley and a year later they were married and Kyoichi was born. Soon after his birth, Kyoichi's parents moved back to Kyoto, Japan with him. There he was raised with love and care. When he turned 9, he began his training to become a mage, as was tradition in the Shishoui family. Ashley was hesitant to let him at first, but then she saw the look of excitement in his eyes after his first day of training. He was trained to fight hand to hand, with weapons, and with magic. He was also mentally trained to help focus, decision making, and how to shield his mind from others (he's not very good at this one). At 15, he discovered he possessed Makotosuki, a common ability in his family, when he was 14. He was then given Black Moon from his father because another tradition in his family was that Black Moon was to be handed down to the current owner's child when they obtained Makotosuki. He trained with the sword very much after getting it, which helped him become good at channeling his magical energy. 6 days after he turned 17, Kyoichi's parents were killed. Stricken with grief, Kyoichi fled his home and vowed to get stronger and learn who killed his parents and one day avenge them. No one saw or heard the battle between his father and the assailant, which was strange because there was a huge amount of damage and evidence of explosions in the forest near the Shishoui home. Then after a few weeks of wandering, Kyoichi sobered up from his mourning and returned home to get some clothes, food, and other supplies. The reason for this? He had heard of a school where he could learn and fit in. A school called Hokkaido Academy.
Who did you PM?: Sakurai

So, overall, good detail. I like detail. I found so many grammar errors, so try to fix that while role playing. Some things I'm still a little iffy about before I accept this:

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>>Your gift contains more than one gift and that isn't allowed. You can have Makotosuki simply be telepathy and that could become acceptable. And this gift will have to be a Stamina Deduction move, by the way.

>>Your weapon is interesting. But, it has a good amount of pros. Please make one con for every pro so it isn't Godly. Your weapon is basically under your control but it says "...He can call it and it will fly towards him, he can also guide its flight." That can be accepted if it was the only thing but it's not. You can, though, take the Pros off and make them into stamina. Also! This one kind of annoyed me: You cannot control lightning and fire because you're not at the level. AND you chose Air/Wind as your element so... yeah.

Once those things are done, post here saying it's been fixed or PM if you have any questions. The sooner this is the fixed, the faster you can be Accepted and RP away.

both the gift and weapon have been given cons, telekinesis is gone, and i fixed some mistakes in the writing. this isn't the first time i've made a rp character, or a version of this character, so that's where the detail came from. so hows it now?

YAY!
*does a dance*

tanks for putting up with me sakurai.